Partly Cloudy
Zip! Quickly the bird dropped the babies off. In a second the white birds were gone.The clouds made the babies; cats, dogs and people. Under all the clouds was a cloud who couldn't make anything. Suddenly he made something but what could it be. His bird had been in the wars. This cloud was not a sun cloud he was a storm cloud! So for the rest of the time he made dangerous babies. The bird did not like this much, in fact not at all. One day his bird decided to go to another cloud. The storm cloud did not know what was
going on. But he came back with gear just in case he got hurt again.
Hi Jess It's Max, That is great explaining at the top and great adverbs and story. on the first line you need to change: Quickly the bird to THE BIRDS. That's all By Max
ReplyDeleteTalofa lava Jessica
ReplyDeleteIt's Isabella and Lavinia from May Road School. We found it really interesting that you made a nice poem about some animals and the bird.You should make the poem into a story.Also why did you name it partly cloudy?
Kia ora jessica,
ReplyDeleteIt's Anastasia I am from May Road School I found it very interesting reading about partly cloudy. It was a nice poem about animals and I want more and can you please make it into a story.
By Anastasia